Take another look at the original sentence:

The grip of the pantyhose, the stranglehold of the scarf, and the bite of the tight shoes made Rachel want the interview to end, she longed for a cotton T-shirt and jeans.

You wanted to fix it this way:

The grip of the pantyhose, the stranglehold of the scarf, and the bite of the tight shoes made Rachel want the interview to end; however, she longed for a cotton T-shirt and jeans.

One way to fix a comma splice is to use a semicolon and a conjunctive adverb like however. You must choose your conjunctive adverb with care, though. However is a contrast word, but the sentence above does not require a contrast transition.

You might want to consult the rules for fixing comma splices and fused sentences.

Go back to the sentence to try again.

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